Worked example
Have a go at rewriting this very informal letter in your notebook.
It’s intended to be sent to an external stakeholder group that you don’t know very well. Give it a more formal, informative and professional tone.
Hiya. We’re really pleased to hear that this project we’ve started is having a good impact on the way the NHS treats it’s staff. That’s really amazing to hear, isn’t it! Anyway, like I said, the project is having a really great impact, especially around retention. And we know retention is super important because, you know, we need to make sure we keep hold of staff. What I’m trying to say is that we’re going to carry on as we are. Do you agree? If you do, tick yes. Love Joe. x
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